It's a little sloppy but I like it so far:) Any feedback is nice. If I do continue it I'm not going to post it anywhere, but I'll make sure your updated☆〜（ゝ。∂）

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*^* can I just say, first off, you are a wonderful writer.

ok, now for the feedback (this might take a bit, I get hefty with feedback especially with writing, going towards an English career and this is good practiceeeee)

what I see is not a finished work, and of course you never get a finished work first shot, but I see a VERY promising rough draft. you laid at your story and used a variety of syntax and sentence lengths, experimenting and allowing your reader's mind to flow more easily with your statements. You did avoid one of the most common issues in writing, even in YA novels. and that's overuse of adjectives. "she sat on the large moist green mossy crumbling log" is a mouthful to say, actually using adverbs or descriptions afterwards buffers it up much nicer. but this is something you didn't even have a problem with ^o^ kudos! what I see is a skeletal frame, so you can build upon each idea. you have multiple different scenes described in little chunks, like when she talks to her friends about the color blue, or when she asks the fish whether they would prefer to see or hear, or eavesdropping on the fishermen. You've provided a strong basis, now I would recommend buffing them up. one thing I noticed right off the bat, you have a very cinematic feel to your writing, I feel like I'm watching a movie and following Jae Eun all throughout. the segments towards the beginning (young girl thinking about blue) and the end (fishermen hinting at a potential plot) seem particularly promising. breathe life into the characters, have some fun with it! based on the outline you have so far, this could easily be 3 chapters if you add enough depth to it. all in all, coming from a writer herself: wonderful draft, shows a lot of potential, maybe be a teensy weensy bit more descriptive? like, just a pinch :0 don't overdo it, that's one of my biggest weaknesses. honestly, I would also have to say that this seems like a very promising story to post someday when you feel confident (but you don't have to and I'll never force you) but overall, those are my thoughts (^◇^;) it was an honor to read your work !