Deleting really soon, but just tell me if this makes sense or not? I’m having a hard time figuring out if I’m over estimating the reader’s inferencing abilities or underestimating it.

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Deleting really soon, but just tell me if this makes sense or not? I’m having a hard time figuring out if I’m over estimating the reader’s inferencing abilities or underestimating it.


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also should i put “it was louder” or is just “louder” fine
ah, this is beautifully written! you did a really great job. i think "it was louder" might be better but just "louder" works too
ooo this is poetic
this is amazing
is this for a story you’re writing?! I love it!
PREACH
oh my god
this is incredible
I NEED MORE
dam u have a natural gift for writing goodness gracious
thanks kat. ily💖
thank you so much kat, ily <3
This is great! Love all the details!
PLEASE DO ID LOVE TO READ IT SKHDBSKSKS