PicCollage

Thoughts?

I do like this story, but I think you might need to add more detail about what is going on since the story is a little vague and doesn't pull you in to the plot

WOW!I love this!! But some more details would be

yeah, more detail would be great, and why are all the words capitalized?

So yeah more detail^^Honestly....I know how hard it is to keep up the intensity, but revealing more of the plot as you go.

I especially have problems with that in my story "Alive"

This chapter was pretty good tho!!👍

ok good to know. do we pick our own symbols? sorry for all the questions, I'm just a really curious person.