I really do want to see more of this! 😊 PRAISE: This story kept me on the edge of my seat, and I am dying to find out what happens next. It is always good to keep the reader from get bored. CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM: As said in the other comments, you need to add more punctuation, because no matter if the reader is interested or not, if you do not have the correct punctuation, it is hard for the reader to understand the sentence