ahh this is so cool! flows nicely, cool rhymes, easy to follow, I love it! I definitely want to know more behind what’s going on here, I love the concept! For constructive criticism, it’s hard for me to really say much for such short pieces of writing, but one thing stuck out to me. In the last stance, the first two lines don’t completely make sense to me. They sound cool but don’t really fit with what’s going on, in my opinions. I think they take away from the last two lines. Other than that, I don’t have much else. Thank you so much for entering, I loved reading this! Keep up the great writing, love to see it!